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bring me freud, jung, piaget, neitzsche, dostoevsky -
i want to understand
this troubled heart.
mine? perhaps, not - i didn't ask it, it didn't say;
the mind, too, is duly uncertain;
tethered to the heart, but not, perhaps, kept by it:
existence is not conclusive proof of anything proprietary.
maybe it belongs to no one.
i belong to no one.

Quick write.
Revision later.
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TheMoorMaiden Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Student Writer
I really like the flow of this one, it reads like a train of thought and I like that aspect of it a lot. I love the line: tethered to the heart, but not, perhaps, kept by it:, I like the relationship between one's heart and one's mind that you're suggesting there. :) For just a quick write I think it's a lovely little piece, great work!
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dietcocaine Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012   Writer
Thank you! :aww:
Mine can't decide if they want to be connected at the hip or a million miles apart.
I think they have relationship issues.
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:iconthemoormaiden:
TheMoorMaiden Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome. :)

:giggle: Sounds complicated.
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:icondietcocaine:
dietcocaine Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012   Writer
It is.
Counselor recommends divorce.
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:iconthemoormaiden:
TheMoorMaiden Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Student Writer
:XD:
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sexpet666 Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Student General Artist
It reminds me of something by Emily Dickinson, or for some reason Emily Bronte's Rememberance.

The "i didn't ask it, it didn't say;" thing is super right where it is.

Hng. Lovely.
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:icondietcocaine:
dietcocaine Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012   Writer
lasdkjfasflasd
Iloveyousomuchyoushouldmarryme.
It's legal in my state now. ;3
:tighthug:
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blueoran Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012
Heart Sick...like telepathy wave ???
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dietcocaine Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012   Writer
I'm not sure I follow what you mean.
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