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bring me freud, jung, piaget, neitzsche, dostoevsky -
i want to understand
this troubled heart.
mine? perhaps, not - i didn't ask it, it didn't say;
the mind, too, is duly uncertain;
tethered to the heart, but not, perhaps, kept by it:
existence is not conclusive proof of anything proprietary.
maybe it belongs to no one.
i belong to no one.

Quick write.
Revision later.
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TheMoorMaiden Nov 14, 2012  Student Writer
I really like the flow of this one, it reads like a train of thought and I like that aspect of it a lot. I love the line: tethered to the heart, but not, perhaps, kept by it:, I like the relationship between one's heart and one's mind that you're suggesting there. :) For just a quick write I think it's a lovely little piece, great work!
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:icondietcocaine:
Thank you! :aww:
Mine can't decide if they want to be connected at the hip or a million miles apart.
I think they have relationship issues.
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:iconthemoormaiden:
TheMoorMaiden Nov 14, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome. :)

:giggle: Sounds complicated.
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:icondietcocaine:
It is.
Counselor recommends divorce.
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:iconthemoormaiden:
TheMoorMaiden Nov 14, 2012  Student Writer
:XD:
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sexpet666 Nov 13, 2012  Student General Artist
It reminds me of something by Emily Dickinson, or for some reason Emily Bronte's Rememberance.

The "i didn't ask it, it didn't say;" thing is super right where it is.

Hng. Lovely.
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:icondietcocaine:
lasdkjfasflasd
Iloveyousomuchyoushouldmarryme.
It's legal in my state now. ;3
:tighthug:
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:iconblueoran:
Heart Sick...like telepathy wave ???
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:icondietcocaine:
I'm not sure I follow what you mean.
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