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heartbeats are psycho-
-somatic, dear;
the ocean has swallowed
me whole.

hay una guitarra bajo
mi almohada, y
sueño de música cuando
estoy solo.


you came here with
city smoke in your lungs,
and i
forgot to breathe.
Actual title should be "la música dulce".

So you're gone and I'm haunted
And I bet you are just fine
Did I make it that easy
To walk right in and out of my life?

I should've known you'd bring me heartache
Almost lovers always do


-- A Fine Frenzy


* Second stanza, roughly translated:
There is a guitar beneath
my pillow, and
I dream in music when
I am alone
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There is a guitar under my pillow and I dream of music when I'm alone. la musica dulce is by *dietcocaine ( Suggested by SilverInkblot and Featured by Nichrysalis )

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UnspecifiedUnknown Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013   Writer
congrats love, so well deserved :rose:
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:icondietcocaine:
dietcocaine Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013   Writer
Thank you muchly, darling :heart:
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:iconthemoormaiden:
TheMoorMaiden Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is such a lovely little piece. :D Congratulations on the DD! :highfive: It's well deserved!
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:icondietcocaine:
dietcocaine Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013   Writer
Thank you! :tighthug:
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:iconwinterkate:
winterkate Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Student Writer
Wow! Congratulations on the DD! This is a lovely work - great syntax and imagery.
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:icondietcocaine:
dietcocaine Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much! 8D
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:iconwinterkate:
winterkate Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Student Writer
You're really welcome! :D
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:iconthorns:
thorns Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013   Writer
:heart:
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:icondietcocaine:
dietcocaine Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013   Writer
Thank you!
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:iconpinballwitch:
pinballwitch Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
Congrats on the DD! :nod: lovely!
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:icondietcocaine:
dietcocaine Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013   Writer
Thank you very much! :la:
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:iconomgitsgreen:
OMGitsgreen Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
My love for this has no bounds. You're fabulous use of syntax makes this not only a pleasure on the eyes but brings a sort of uniqueness that I absolutely adore :tighthug:
Congratulations on the well deserved DD! :clap:
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:icondietcocaine:
dietcocaine Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much! :hug:
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:iconcarolyn7727:
Carolyn7727 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Student Writer
My half-translation:
hay una guitarra bajo - there is a short guitar
mi almohada, y - my *something*, and
sueño de música cuando - *something* of music when
estoy solo. - I'm alone

Great poem!
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:icondietcocaine:
dietcocaine Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013   Writer
I've added a rough translation to the Author's Comments;
it's probably not perfect, but as close as I can get.

And thank you! :)
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:iconthesawyer:
Thesawyer Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
hay una guitarra - there's a guitar
bajo mi almohada - under my couch
y sueño de musica - and i dream of music
cuando estoy solo - when i'm alone

;)
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:iconcarolyn7727:
Carolyn7727 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you :) Wow that sounds good, even better than when I had half the words
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:iconthesawyer:
Thesawyer Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013
it's a beautiful poem, that's sure
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:iconpinballwitch:
pinballwitch Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
Pillow ;P not couch :couch:

as the DD box says
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:iconthesawyer:
Thesawyer Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
ohh
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:iconisabellamichel:
IsabellaMichel Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Student Writer
Me gusta. I've always wanted to write a poem in two languages pero nunca se como hacerlo. This is great. I quite adored it. I also love the A Fine Frenzy lyrics too. :)
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:icondietcocaine:
dietcocaine Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013   Writer
I wish I knew enough to write more like this;
it would be so awesome to be truly multilingual.
And thank you! :)
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:iconisabellamichel:
IsabellaMichel Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Student Writer
All you have to do is pick up a few more words here and there and before you know it, you will be! :)
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:icondietcocaine:
dietcocaine Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013   Writer
Haha, I'm trying! :D
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:iconexnihilo-nihil:
Exnihilo-nihil Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Professional Writer
:clap:
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:icondietcocaine:
dietcocaine Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013   Writer
:)
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OakleePoakdee Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013   General Artist
AHH!! A fine frenzy! This is beautiful. You certainly deserve your DD.
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:icondietcocaine:
dietcocaine Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much! :)
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:iconoakleepoakdee:
OakleePoakdee Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013   General Artist
You're very welcome.
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:iconnatushka:
Natushka Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013   Writer
Felicitaciones :^^: Es un texto poderoso.
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:icondietcocaine:
dietcocaine Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013   Writer
Muchas gracias, muito obrigado, thank you very much! :)
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:iconmefsaal:
mefsaal Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
es hermoso....
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:icondietcocaine:
dietcocaine Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013   Writer
Gracias, thank you! :)
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:iconzee-who:
Zee-Who Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist
Congrats on your Daily Deviation!:squee::heart:
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:icondietcocaine:
dietcocaine Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013   Writer
Thank you! :la:
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the well deserved DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :heart:
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:icondietcocaine:
dietcocaine Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much! :hug:
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure :happybounce:
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:iconwingdiamond:
WingDiamond Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
:thumbsup:
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:icondietcocaine:
dietcocaine Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013   Writer
Thank you. :)
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:iconwingdiamond:
WingDiamond Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013
De nada. Avalanch no tuveron razon ... Todos los poetas NO han muerto!
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:icondietcocaine:
dietcocaine Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013   Writer
Impresionante, gracias por compartir!
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hunting-shadows Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful.
Could you maybe translate the Spanish part for me?
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:icondietcocaine:
dietcocaine Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013   Writer
I've added a rough translation to the Author's Comments. :)
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:iconwingdiamond:
WingDiamond Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
"There is a bass guitar, my pillow and dream of music when I'm alone."
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:iconpinballwitch:
pinballwitch Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
rather than bass guitar, bajo = under in this case

(but guitarra bajo can be a base guitar...here though bajo looks like a preposition)
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:iconwingdiamond:
WingDiamond Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
Yeah, I thought my translation looked kinda funny!
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:iconnichrysalis:
Nichrysalis Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The translation is in the DD description. :)
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:iconbrassteeth:
brassteeth Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
Marvellous, wonderful!! Great final stanza, congratulations on your D.D!
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:icondietcocaine:
dietcocaine Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much! :hug:
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